Creation by fans of the game.

I didn't like that you called creation, regardless of its quality, "pointless".

You have a habit of taking phrases out of context. Just like that paragraph from "War and Peace" I mentioned. I didn't write that creation is pointless; I wrote: "Why write something that contains no meaning?" And this phrase was used in the context that the meaning of what was written will only reach us if we find out everything that is going on in Blacky's head.

I don't really want to read and break this text down into quotes across a screen and a half,

A good position. I don't want to break down the text, but I can argue with those who have taken it upon themselves to do so. The only question is, what is the point of this argument? First express your own opinion, then comment on mine. Another question: what would you have written?

Next, Black, special for you, I'm criticizing without trolling.

And you're laughing at Agler. Yes, he really collapsed holding his stomach and forehead (or rather, the mask), but there's nothing funny about that here, and none of his people could have beaten him.

Yeah. And he woke up from a kick to the jaw. Nobody could have beaten him. Tell me, do you get woken up like that often?

the road was small, small in the sense that they drove quickly.

Not "long". In that sense, in Russian, it is written as "не длинной".

they of course didn't know that there were 40000 of them

I'm not nitpicking the 40000, for that matter. Percentages, my ignorant friend. Percentages. Where on earth did the percentages come from there?

The goal of the Blacks was to destroy the Mailers; for this, they had to get to Bodgvar, or in the best case, Lancet.

Again, where in what you've put up for our judgment is this written? We aren't reading your thoughts.

Now let's go over what I wrote once more:

- Is everything alright with you, lord? - a warrior asked him

To hell with the question mark. The person, or whatever he is, as you wrote, "collapsed holding his stomach and forehead". No one asks him how they can help or "what's wrong with you". They ask him if everything is "alright". If I were Agler, I'd answer:
- Yes, everything is fine, maracuya, I just like walking hunched over! Idiots!

In an instant, several images flashed before Agler. Everything became clearer, the pain vanished.

What images? Why did the pain vanish from understanding something?

In the year 538 of the era of suffering, a dark camp was set up near a port city,

As I already wrote, the style here is as if you're talking about the past, and then you suddenly jump to the present.

In the year 538 of the era of suffering, a dark camp was set up near a port city, a spy was sent without delay.

Analyzing the sentence as a whole doesn't provide an understanding of the situation. Yes, it became clear to me that the action is happening now, that it's currently the year 538, and that the camp is near a port city. But what spy and where was he sent? Is the city friendly to the darks or not? Was the spy sent from the city or from the dark camp? And where was he sent? If a camp of hostile darks is set up near the city, then no one will be let into the city, and it's better to use a scout rather than a spy.

- Well, whether we want it or not, we will have to take the city even at the cost of lives... We'll begin the attack at night.

The phrase isn't bad, filled with a moderate amount of pathos, but you don't write where and how it's mentioned. Therefore, reread once more what I wrote about it in the previous post.

- Yes, lord. - Agler's voice sounded in his head.

Why does Agler's voice sound in his own head? If he answered the Lord mentally, then write it that way, otherwise it's literally a split personality.

Agler lowered the knife, stepped back and began to wait for the words of Andargan's messenger.

Where did the messenger come from? Or was he the one who woke him with a kick to the jaw? Quite a messenger then, doesn't value Agler at all; it will be impossible to bring such people under control without a massacre, and likely even with one. Judge for yourself: Barack Obama comes to a meeting with Medvedev and immediately gives Medvedev a kick to the jaw! What the hell kind of negotiations are those after that?

The lord of the waves himself came out to meet them. Without words, Agler understood what Andargan had planned, everything was becoming simpler.

But I didn't understand. And none of the readers understood. There's a guess that Andargan decided to fight 1 on 1, but where is the development of the situation? Why does it then say:

The garrison army has now donned dark attire, the defeat of the enemy was inevitable...

Which garrison's army donned dark attire? Why does this contribute to the enemy's defeat? What happened to Andargan?

Yes, there are many moments, I don't have time for everything right now. I'll quote myself once more, read it and think.

This old man. Did he burn the port single-handedly? Or are there still residents in the city and they betrayed him?

The time is an absolute horror. They reached the forest in an hour plus Agler's nap after lunch, they arrived by midnight. On the way back, dragging ships, straining so hard that old wounds reopened and blood started flowing (flowing, not "crawling"! Monsters crawl out of dark holes!), they left at lunch and arrived a few hours before sunset. How is that even possible? Is there no sunset there, a midnight sun? What's with these dances with time?

And who chose Agler to pull the ships? If Agler is the commander here, then only he himself could have taken this upon himself, but in your version they "chose and did not bypass Agler"...