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Vegtam was also chosen for the role of necromancer for a reason (let's remember his recent hobbies).
I've always been a modest dark messiah. :rolleyes:
However, I don't agree with Vegtam being the main villain (why him???). In general, we're waiting for the continuation!
There's no need to divide into good and evil - each side must have its own truth. By the way, I wouldn't kill students and teachers so brazenly without a good reason.
I just wanted to nitpick. :rolleyes:
completely different people, in different periods of history and time.
The comma here is unnecessary.
Besides healing magic, Lisard also studied the ways of fire, and always said that fire magic is beautiful and can be simply mesmerizing, and at the same time, he reminded that it is one of the most dangerous and destructive schools.
Too many "and" conjunctions in a row. The second one can be replaced with "it", the third with "but".
Thus, many people became so-called battle mages.
The second comma is unnecessary. "Battle mages" should probably be enclosed in quotation marks.
Basically, the emphasis was placed on combat skills, and magic helped them in this, making their attacks more destructive and faster, and making them more agile and stronger.
It looks better as: "Basically, they focused on combat skills, and magic helped them in this, making their attacks destructive and fast, and themselves agile and strong."
One of the students interrupted the teacher, asking a question that was very relevant - "last time we asked you if you could cover your body with fire? You didn't answer."
Lisard extinguished the flame in his hand, smiled slightly, and then answered - "theoretically, it is possible to cover your body with a veil of fire, but this requires very strong concentration and skill... I, unfortunately, or even fortunately, cannot do this."
- Well, now let's continue our topic today - the fair-haired Lisard took a steel sword out of the closet - "the previous question was very relevant.
You repeat twice that the question was very relevant.
Lisard took the sword by the handle of the sword.
It looks a bit awkward.
the guy kissed the girl, and she reciprocated.
Either specify that they are kissing each other on the cheek, or rephrase it a bit. When I first read it, I got scared :D
master of air magic, Vegtam is accused.
There should be another comma after Vegtam.
Vegtam is accused of premeditated murder of one of the teachers, in order to conceal the crime.
To conceal what crime? I'm curious. :rolleyes:
As it became known, this morning, Vegtam left the academy.
One of the commas is unnecessary.
Suddenly, a voice of Arandor was heard from the hall: - "Magnus, send me and my friends to look for him, we will bring him back!".
Since everyone or almost everyone present sees Arandor, it is better to write that he spoke (as an option - stood up and spoke). "Suddenly" is almost a filler word.
he will return the necromancer for justice.
As an option - "he will return him for the sake of justice".
This school provided an opportunity to modify one's own body.
I would write "The magic of this school provided an opportunity...".
Nebo was a chronicler and librarian. He was responsible for granting access to the first levels of the archive.
It is preferable to combine these sentences into one using the conjunction "and" (other options are possible).
their friend.
Instead of "their", use "their".
Meanwhile, the punitive squad was already ready. It consisted of five people. It was led by Siverfale - one of the best guardians of the academy. After getting into the van, they set off in search of the necromancer...
I'm interested in the entire composition of the squad, if the author didn't hide it intentionally. And I didn't quite understand about the van.
In the chair, or rather on the throne, sat Magnus, as usual - dressed in all black. When everyone sat down and silence fell, everyone began to wait for the archmage to speak (it was forbidden to interrupt him in the academy).
It's almost a tyranny. It definitely needs to be overthrown. :rolleyes:
As an example, one can take Arandor, Hostor, and Vervolka. And if the first two were listed in the academy, the latter was an employee of one of the private companies that used mages for various jobs. Yes, as was predicted at the very beginning, magic began to be used not only for peaceful purposes, but also for personal ones. Officially, the use of magic outside of special institutions (schools, research centers) was prohibited and prosecuted by law throughout the world.
Vervolka also breaks the law. Something tells me... :rolleyes:
I think that's all
Наше оружие - неожиданность! Неожиданность и страх, страх и неожиданность - это два наших оружия! Плюс безжалостность - три наших оружия: страх, неожиданность и безжалостность! И ещё фанатичная преданность Папе - четвёртое! Наше оружие включает в себя... наше оружие включает в себя... страх, неожиданность... я сейчас!