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The last thing left to do – Albin waved his knife, and a finger with the man's ring remained in his hand. Proof that he was killed.
It's a few days' journey to Glenger. Night had fallen, and our hero decided to spend the night in a tavern. In the morning, after breakfast and watching a couple of fights, the young man went to the city, where he was expected. He needed to reach the underground passage within the day, and then it would be easier.
On the way, Albin kept examining the ring...
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Two figures in austere robes leaned over the body.
- Do you think this is a hit?
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Dear colleagues! If we are creating a literary work, this is normal. But if we are talking about a future script, the two figures should be leaning over the body before the hero has time to spend the night, continue on his journey, etc. Or did the two figures lean over the body the next day?
If this is a film, it is not necessary to refer to the main character by many names in the script; here, even an artistic style of writing is not necessary.
In general, I haven't fully understood what is being planned here.
The last thing left to do – Albin waved his knife, and a finger with the man's ring remained in his hand. Proof that he was killed.
It's a few days' journey to Glenger. Night had fallen, and our hero decided to spend the night in a tavern. In the morning, after breakfast and watching a couple of fights, the young man went to the city, where he was expected. He needed to reach the underground passage within the day, and then it would be easier.
On the way, Albin kept examining the ring...
***
Two figures in austere robes leaned over the body.
- Do you think this is a hit?
.................
Dear colleagues! If we are creating a literary work, this is normal. But if we are talking about a future script, the two figures should be leaning over the body before the hero has time to spend the night, continue on his journey, etc. Or did the two figures lean over the body the next day?
If this is a film, it is not necessary to refer to the main character by many names in the script; here, even an artistic style of writing is not necessary.
In general, I haven't fully understood what is being planned here.
I've got a hole in my pocket!
© Ринго Старр
© Ринго Старр