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I like the story idea :) , but here's a suggestion regarding the "readability" of the text - the name Zark is mentioned too often at the beginning of each sentence (I read it several times - it sounds a bit awkward). I suggest rearranging or replacing it with some kind of nickname. That's it.
I'm also thinking about a continuation!!! :smile01:
I'm also thinking about a continuation!!! :smile01:
