Sir Syddan
I played through your scenario. For a first attempt, it's "good enough." One of its strengths is the plot's premise – it's intriguing, as it resembles the plot of one of the games in the Amnesia series. However, the plot only exists at the beginning and end of the scenario, and there are only a few lines when visiting the Lich, which is weak for a story-driven scenario. And, of course, the text suffers from spelling errors, typos, and missing spaces. The gameplay isn't particularly outstanding either – there's one strong hero who doesn't really challenge us, and a large number of resources and monsters for creating vampires. The quests offer choices, which is a plus. The landscape isn't remarkable, but I liked the implementation of the waterfall with the water temple.
My rating is 5.5/10, as a preliminary score for the effort.