Again, did you write this randomly just for the sake of it, or...?
If not, please specify where you found the errors (and not just in some battle, but specifically in which turn and with which unit), and what exactly the error is (only if you write this without actually playing that battle in reality, generating a similar situation - but just because it seems that way to you, then your words will be absolutely meaningless).
No, actually, I meant the writing style and grammar...
I'm certainly not Leo Tolstoy myself, but I agree that any instruction is much easier to read when it is written without using slang and in accordance with generally accepted language norms.
The above is undoubtedly valuable, but it is slightly unsystematic and composed a bit spontaneously. If everything were organized and a general system developed... :)
That's what I mean...
Wüst und leer und ohne Segen.
Hier bin ich durch dich gefangen,
Muss für dich durchs Feuer gehen.
Du siehst mich in Flammen stehen,
Glühend will ich dich empfangen.