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“Capture the imps. Hire gremlins and place gremlins in the town.” - The verb forms don't match. The action in the script is a one-time event.
“Capture the horned demons, nightmares…” - the same issue.
“Capture the villain hero”, in another place “requires a villain-hero” - what kind of bizarre creature is that? It seems like Russian isn't their native language. The original says valiant hero - for those who understand, feel the difference.
“A mighty mage, I will fight only…”. In all other places, the mage was a Great Mage; in English, the words in the mage's epithets didn't change.
“Smash them all”, “All - smash” - Why is such slang inserted into the epic about the Great Mage?
In the orc biography section: “TODO: About the orc hero” - what is this stump? Even if it's in the original, they could have shown at least some imagination and written: “the orc was just born and has no biography.”
Sir 13Ga,
I translated the script specifically for the stream, quickly and with the help of Google Translate (it's more convenient, you can immediately insert the translated text without typing it manually) and only cared about understanding the text. The slang slightly diversified the monotonous "kill them all."
TODO was in the original map; the author was probably planning to continue working on the script and insert some picture or something else. I will be glad if you take on the ideal translation from a literary point of view, and I ask that you replace my name in the acknowledgments with yours.