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Is this how the long-awaited revival of the mafia looks? What times, what morals...
Tox, I'll say it straight, I don't like your set. The cringeworthy theme is one thing, even Nebo had some mind-blowing sets in that regard, but yours is not only cringeworthy, it's also bad, and that's not very good. Also, you seem to have forgotten that not everyone here is a fan of anime and Japanese culture. But okay, okay, let's just move on and abstract. What else I don't like is that the set is mechanically very simple and standard, it's just all laid out according to a template. At least come up with some new, interesting mechanics, rape doesn't count, I still don't understand how it differs from murder. You can't get by with just colorful descriptions, you need to think better about how it relates to the game.
In short, the set feels aesthetically unpleasant, uninteresting, and very raw. It needs a thorough rework, but I would advise going back to other ideas.
Tox, I'll say it straight, I don't like your set. The cringeworthy theme is one thing, even Nebo had some mind-blowing sets in that regard, but yours is not only cringeworthy, it's also bad, and that's not very good. Also, you seem to have forgotten that not everyone here is a fan of anime and Japanese culture. But okay, okay, let's just move on and abstract. What else I don't like is that the set is mechanically very simple and standard, it's just all laid out according to a template. At least come up with some new, interesting mechanics, rape doesn't count, I still don't understand how it differs from murder. You can't get by with just colorful descriptions, you need to think better about how it relates to the game.
In short, the set feels aesthetically unpleasant, uninteresting, and very raw. It needs a thorough rework, but I would advise going back to other ideas.