It's all a matter of opinion; I, for example, don't see any problem. Although, I wouldn't mind making a few adjustments. ... I think if you look closely, you can find more similar flaws. But this doesn't diminish the creators' effort.
For example, the artifact description:
"Dragon Shield. Adds 3 to attack and 3 to defense. - I agree, that's correct.
It is part of the MOD composite artifact. - let it be, although it's not necessary.
In addition, this artifact is also part of the MOD (list of all artifacts)." - why clutter the information like this? Especially if there is only 1 artifact from this set on the map.
You yourself gave an example of awkward phrasing.
There are also complaints about the correct spelling of phrases, with all the filler words and punctuation marks. And they can't just say it simply and concisely.
And there is too much of this kind of garbage here (in the megapack).
When I compared both packs, I tried to fix some things in the superpack, taking into account the megapack. But I quickly realized that it's much easier for me to edit it myself than to constantly refer to the megapack.
Справочник по НоММ-4 http://handbookhmm.ru/pamyatka-dlya-heroes-iv.html
Памятка по НоММ-3 http://handbookhmm.ru/pamyatka-dlya-homm-iii.html
и HotA http://handbookhmm.ru/vyishla-obnovlennaya-pamyatka-dlya-homm-iii-hota.html